June 2 2006 | arielmstallings

My friend Patrick (who was my copy chief during my time at, and who therefore is intimately acqainted with all my writerly flaws) is doing an editing pass at my book, and his feedback is the best. Here's an example from the chapter about rings:

As for Andreas and I me, we ultimately decided that we liked the symbolism of rings — I'm pretty dang agnostic, but what faith I have tends to revolve around cycles and circles. It's the shape that planets move in****TECHNICALLY, PLANETS MOVE IN ELLIPTICAL ORBITS, NOT CIRCULAR ONES****, that rain droplets form, that our pupils are shaped have.

  1. That's just awesome. Although, I have to disagree with Patrick on the substitution of "have" – the copula verb is for wimps!

    I so wish your book had been around when I got married.

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