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My friend Patrick (who was my copy chief during my time at Movies.com, and who therefore is intimately acqainted with all my writerly flaws) is doing an editing pass at my book, and his feedback is the best. Here’s an example from the chapter about rings:
As for Andreas and
Ime, we ultimately decided that we liked the symbolism of rings — I’m pretty dang agnostic, but what faith I have tends to revolve around cycles and circles. It’s the shape that planets move in****TECHNICALLY, PLANETS MOVE IN ELLIPTICAL ORBITS, NOT CIRCULAR ONES****, that rain droplets form, that our pupilsare shapedhave.
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4 responses to this entryBrianna
June 2nd, 2006 · 9:48 AM · #That’s just awesome. Although, I have to disagree with Patrick on the substitution of “have” - the copula verb is for wimps!
I so wish your book had been around when I got married.
Stephanie
June 2nd, 2006 · 11:10 AM · #Nice.
travis
June 6th, 2006 · 2:24 AM · #the circle is the 2D shape of our planet, though indeed not our orbit…
Kit
July 19th, 2008 · 6:47 AM · #“Are” is almost as bad as “have”. At least “have” is more succinct.