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Posted by Ariel · Writing

My friend Patrick (who was my copy chief during my time at Movies.com, and who therefore is intimately acqainted with all my writerly flaws) is doing an editing pass at my book, and his feedback is the best. Here's an example from the chapter about rings:

As for Andreas and I me, we ultimately decided that we liked the symbolism of rings — I'm pretty dang agnostic, but what faith I have tends to revolve around cycles and circles. It's the shape that planets move in****TECHNICALLY, PLANETS MOVE IN ELLIPTICAL ORBITS, NOT CIRCULAR ONES****, that rain droplets form, that our pupils are shaped have.