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Offbeat Bride the book
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on June 02, 2006
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My friend Patrick (who was my copy chief during my time at Movies.com, and who therefore is intimately acqainted with all my writerly flaws) is doing an editing pass at my book, and his feedback is the best. Here's an example from the chapter about rings:
As for Andreas and
Ime, we ultimately decided that we liked the symbolism of rings — I'm pretty dang agnostic, but what faith I have tends to revolve around cycles and circles. It's the shape that planets move in****TECHNICALLY, PLANETS MOVE IN ELLIPTICAL ORBITS, NOT CIRCULAR ONES****, that rain droplets form, that our pupilsare shapedhave.
About Ariel Meadow Stallings
Author of Offbeat Bride: Creative Alternatives for Independent Brides, Ariel acts as the publisher of all the Offbeat Empire websites. She lives, loves, and dorks out hard in Seattle, WA.
Brianna said
That's just awesome. Although, I have to disagree with Patrick on the substitution of "have" – the copula verb is for wimps!
I so wish your book had been around when I got married.
Stephanie said
Nice.
travis said
the circle is the 2D shape of our planet, though indeed not our orbit…
Kit said
"Are" is almost as bad as "have". At least "have" is more succinct.